Composition- Broken Promise
English exam comin' up. So, I am gonna write a composition as a practice. This composition is called " Broken Promise". Please sit back and enjoy.
There was once when I broke a promise and as a result, lost something very precious. I lost something that gold can never buy- a friendship. It started on a typical Saturday...
Sally was my old and close chum I met in kindergarten. She and I went to different secondary school but we kept in touch with each other. We went through the ups and downs of primary school life together and helped each other with school work.
However, after we went to different secondary school, we began to drift apart but we were still good friends.
That day, Sally called me early in the morning. "Hullo," I mumbled into the phone, sleepy but awake.
"Hey! Do you miss me? I was thinking if you would want to come and watch me play in a badminton tournament tomorrow at noon in my school hall. I could use a little support and my other friends are busy on that day," Sally asked, words tumbling out of her mouth quickly.
"Huh?" I replied. So, Sally repeated what she said slower. "Uh, ok," I answered without thinking. I felt exhausted and wanted to sleep for another five minutes.
Even from my side, I could feel Sally beaming,"Thanks! That means a lot to me! You are my only support, so make sure you turn up, promise?"
As I wanted to get off the phone as soon as possible, I promised Sally. So, I made a promise, I never thought it would lead to this. Putting the phone down, I fell straight into bed, asleep again.
Next day, I hadn't forgotten about my promise to Sally. However, in the afternoon, the house phone started to ring. "Ring ring..." I picked up the receiver and said," Hello?" It was my new best friend on the phone.
"Hi, Mabel, what's up?" I asked cheerfully. There was a pause, and then,"I've got great news!" squeaked Mabel. She was so loud that I winced.
"And?" I probbed.
"Well, you know about movie you asked me to accompany you to watch but my mum said that I can't? Well, she changed her mind! We can go to the movies today! Isn't that great!" Mabel exclaimed. Happiness whooshed through me.
A few days ago, I had wanted to watch this movie called "Ghost portal" and wanted Mabel to come as she was the only friend I had who likes to watch horror movies like me.
However, her mother objected to the idea so I did not buy the tickets but now that Mabel's mother had changed her mind, I was estatic! Of course, I would not say no to this chance!
"Yeah, it is a miracle! What did you do to convince your mother?" I replied, holding the phone tightly and jumping up and down like a toddler. Mabel and I made plans to watch the movie that afternoon after lunch. I was in such a high spirit that I totally forgot about the promise to Sally. It just slipped out of my mind!
So, that faithful afternoon, Mabel and I went to the cinema. We had a great time there, hugging each other when we were scared and laughing when someone screamed. It was only when I started to walk home when the promise popped into my mind.
"Oh no!" I thought. Suddenly, all the happiness I was feeling just a moment ago vanished. Instead, it was replaced by anxiety and guilt. I rushed to Sally's school, hoping to be able to support her even if it was for a while.
Why had I let it slip my mind? I cursed myself for being so careless.
When I reached her school, I saw people walking out of the school gate. Some of them were crying and some of them ambled out of the school with their heads held high.
Immediately, I saw Sally sitting alone in the canteen, tears pouring down her cheeks like heavy rain. In one hand, she held her badminton racket, in the other, she clutched her phone.
Even though I knew that it was a very bad idea, I could not help feeling pity and ran towards Sally.
Sally saw me and her tear-stained face showed anger clearly. "Get away from me! You are a terrible friend, I hate you!" Sally shouted, standing up and backing away from me. She glared at me.
I defended myself,"I am so sorry, it completely slipped off my mind! I am as frustrated as you are."
"Is that true? Didn't you enjoy watching movies with your new best friend?" Sally argued, emphasising on the words "new, best friends".
"I forgot! Anyway, how did you know that?" I exclaimed.
There was disappointment in her eyes as she spoke." I tried to call you but couldn't get through, so I called your mum. She told me everything. How could you forget? You promised. I thought you would take your promises seriously. I am so disappointed in you. It was terrible."
Hearing this made me overwhelmed with guilt and sadness, and the fact that I was enjoying myself when she was suffering somehow felt wrong.
"What happened?" I asked worriedly. Suddenly, Sally was fuming again. "What happened? You want to know what happened? Okay, I got distracted so I lost! I lost, all because I had no support. My parents were not free, my friends were not free and you had completely forgotten about me!" she spat.
I started to speak but Sally held out a hand. She looked at the floor, tears splashing down and said softly,"Don't try to defend yourself. You made an empty promise. I was a fool to believe that you were going to come. You have new friends and don't need me anymore. I'm sorry but from now on, you are not my friend. I hope you get to spend more time with your new best friend now without me bugging you to meet up. And can I suggest you to make real promises next time? It really hurts when you don't."
With that, she ran away, wiping her tears with the back of her hand.
I could not move, but my eyes brimming with tears. I could not believe that I just lost a friend. However much I regretted, it was all too late now.
There goes the friendship between Sally and me, those moments when we laughed and cried together. To think that I had exchanged my oldest and closest friend for a stupid movie made my heart break.
It all started with horror movie, and ended with a broken promise and a lost friendship.
19 Comments:
The story was excellent...just that it was a little too exaggerating. You could have shorten the story by removing unnecessary details.
Instead of "There was once when I broke a promise and as a result, lost something very precious. I lost something that gold can never buy- a friendship. It started on a typical Saturday...",you could have written "There was once when I broke a promise and as a result, I lost something very precious. I lost something that could not be bought by gold- a friendship. It happened on a typical Saturday...".
nice one, mate
Great essay!
wow!Its nice 👍
It may be better if you had not state that you broke your promise in the first paragraph. The last paragraph may be more better.
It wasn't lame by the way
I Like ur compo
nice! it wasn't lame
the first para can change a little. It's not lame!
IDK people say is lame
nice essay but maybe you can add in mot=re good phrases
I like ur compo but there is a great mistake I think is that u and sally just broke ur friendship like that? its a bit too bad for that and u should stories should always have a good ending if not teacher will have the same feeling as me thinking that its too sad and give u low mark (I say this is because I had experience that before when I wrote a similar story and got bad marks because of the ending is not good)
The ending totally depends upon the topic, This topic is to have something like that but yes the ending can be changed. Its also true that u don't get good marks sue to ur ending, again this totally depends on the topic
Superb story
the ending should be happy
GOOD ONE!!! I LOVE IT
can you do better? it was awesome
wth
You should look at yourself and reflect
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